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It’s that time again – Friday Fictioneers 100-word story from Rochelle Wisoff-Fields’ photo prompt. I hope you enjoy it.
PHOTO PROMPT – © Al Forbes
The Project
Nick looked in the side mirror of his dad’s SUV at the old cars tied to the trailer.
“Why did you buy those old heaps?” They run on steam. Lame.
Dad sighed. Slowly. They aren’t heaps.
“They’re project cars. To work on during our weekend’s together.” Teenagers.
Nick’s turn to sigh. Deeply. Oh joy.
“Every weekend?” I do not want to spend ‘our’ weekends fixing YOUR cars.
Dad gripped the steering wheel a little tighter. Stay cool.
“Well – yeah – for a few hours anyway. You know, something different.” Divorce sucks.
Nick sat sullenly. “I guess.” Divorce sucks.
snapshots of everything 
Dear Kathy,
A lot of backstory layered between your few words. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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What a great piece, really like your take on the prompt.
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Well, at least they got to the same conclusion…that is something to start from.
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I can just see it… the “under the breath” or in the mind comments… divorce does suck; trying to find a common activity, not easy. This was excellent.
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I really like how you worked with the inner voice… it’s like two monologues connecting… divorce and teenagers can’t be easy…
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Thank you. I like how it reads. I’ve been in both seats.
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The words beneath the words. Brilliant.
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Thank you!
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A very well constructed piece. Sometimes connecting with your kids is difficult for both parties.
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Thank you! Yes, especially in that situation, and I’ve been on both sides.
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I like this very much, the inner voices are great. Maybe dad learns that he doesn’t always know best, and that talking about things avoids trouble.
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Thanks! I know that there are things I think that are better left unspoken. Saves a bit of trouble later on.
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Well, they have something they can agree on, I guess… I like how the dialogue is followed by their thoughts. Id added depth the to story; though it took me a few moments to figure out what was going on because your layout effectively switches pov each line.
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Thank you!
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Too many times ‘spending quality time’ has so many different meanings!
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